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 FR> =================================================================
 FR>                       WARD'S WONDERING WAYS
 FR> =================================================================

 FR>              Ward's Wondering Ways
 FR>              By Ward Dossche
 FR>              2:292/854

 FR> In July 1969 man walked for the first time on the moon, First the
 FR> recently deceased Neil Armstrong, followed moments later by
 FR> Edwin "Buzz" Aldrin.

 FR> Everybody even today knows Armstrong's landmark "One small step for
 FR> man; one giant leap for mankind" statement. It was followed by
 FR> several remarks, the usual COM traffic between him, the other
 FR> astronauts, on the mission and Mission Control. Before he re-entered
 FR> the lander, he allegedly made the enigmatic remark

 FR>       "Good luck, Mr. Gorsky."

 FR> For years people have questioned what it meant and Armstrong never
 FR> commented upon it.

 FR> However, 26 years after the moonwalk he did. Apparently mr.Gorsky
 FR> had passed away and Armstrong felt free to speak now.

 FR> Armstrong and his brother, so the tale goes, were playing baseball
 FR> in the backyard. His brother hit a ball which landed in front of
 FR> the Gorsky's, their neighbors, bedroom window.

 FR> As young Armstrong leaned down to pick up the ball, he heard
 FR> Mrs.Gorsky shouting at Mr. Gorsky, "Oral sex? Oral sex you want?
 FR> You'll get oral sex when the kid next door walks on the moon!"

 FR> So during the summer of 2004 I was in Seward Alaska
 FR> and on a particular date visiting the SeaLife Center there which
 FR> had been established with oil compensation money after the "Exxon
 FR> Valdez" disaster.

 FR> It so happened that Aldrin was visiting that day and there was a
 FR> handful of tickets for people to attend a presentation by the once
 FR> moonwalker from 34 years before.

 FR> It was pretty interesting. For example, the man was very short but
 FR> that never really shows from pictures, however these astronauts
 FR> had to be short, if you ever have seen an Apollo spaceship in the
 FR> National Air & Space Museum on the Mall in Washington DC, you'd
 FR> realise how cramped it was.

 FR> After his presentation there were some minutes for Q&A so I tried
 FR> my luck and asked clarification about the Gorsky-statement. Aldrin
 FR> had to laugh and explained it was one of the best space-jokes ever
 FR> but that none of it was true.

 FR> It was a hoax which started in about 1995, he explained which could
 FR> only have a life due to the internet, the speed of dispersal of
 FR> "news" and the impossibility of stopping a hoax such as that to
 FR> reproduce itself.

 FR> "Next Question!"

 FR> So there was this very fat lady asking "When you were outthere on
 FR> the surface of the Moon, did you have some kind of a divine moment
 FR> inspired by a higher being?"

 FR> Aldrin looked at the woman, smiled and said ...

 FR> "Lady, we went there for all mankind, not just for Presbytareans"

 FR> ... and "that" is a true quote.

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